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Demonstrates good degree of involvement as it directly addressed the readers.

Content feels confused and arguments are opposing. There is a conflict in the idea expressed.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

KOR

B2_0

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Utilized real experiences to convey the message with a certain degree of clarity.

Can benefit from more complex vocabulary, sophisticated manner of expression and higher involvement of readers.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

KOR

B1_2

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59.5

Essay has an idea of its stand and what it hopes to express.

Can benefit from a more logical arrangement of thoughts and explanation.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

TWN

B1_2

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93.5

Language and grammar used are conversational but well-versed and properly explained in a relatable manner with high involvement.

Can benefit from more complex vocabulary and sophisticated manner of expression.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

THA

B1_1

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40.5

Essay exhibits good fluency and willingness to communicate thoughts in writing.

Has lapses in grammar and sentence structure along with logical order that impede comprehensibility.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

TWN

B1_2

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Demonstrates high involvement as it directly addressed the readers.

Has lapses in grammar and sentence structure that somehow impede comprehensibility.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

TWN

B1_1

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Essay exhibits good fluency and willingness to communicate thoughts in writing.

Can benefit from higher involvement to fully engage the readers and contains minor lapses in grammar.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

IDN

B1_1

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31.5

Essay has a logical order of sentences and key points.

Can benefit from more complex vocabulary, sophisticated manner of expression and higher involvement of readers.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

TWN

B2_0

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Fully exhausted words in expression and demonstrated high fluency.

Has minor lapses in grammar and punctuation that somehow interfere with comprehensibility.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

CHN

B1_2

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44.5

Message of the essay was somehow conveyed with clarity.

Has minor lapses in grammar and punctuation but does not impede comprehensibility.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have parttime job, they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many choice which we like or want to in school. in college, we choose many to learnven are not major department, also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can many things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have ? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students years in Taiwan spend one third of years major classes, and more than one third other classes rest of time is not much to you anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you money is most important to your life, but, my opinion, learning is really the most important.

I don't agree that it's important for college students to have a part time job, besides they must. Taiwan's education is not similar to U. S; we don't have many vary choice to choose which one we like or want to touch in school. Only in college, we choose many way to learn, even you are not major the department, you also can choose the class of other departments. In college, you can touch many vary things, and you can control what time you want to go to school except major classes. How many classes you have touched? Except major classes, you have much time to do you want to do, you might want to rest instead of in class all day, you can use the time to swim or do some sports. How long will you stay in college? General students are 4 years in Taiwan, you spend one third times of 4 years to major classes, and more than one third to other classes, the rest of time is not much to you to do anything you want to realize deeply. Sometimes, you thought money is most important to your life, but, to my opinion, learning is really the most important.

THA

A2_0

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66.5

The writer had many supporting samples to support his idea.

Some run-on error and error-free in vocabulary

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

JPN

A2_0

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80

The essay was well organized, had logical idea to support writer point of view.

Some run-on sentences.

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

IDN

B1_1

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25

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28

nan

grammar and vocabulary need to be adjusted

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

JPN

B1_2

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39

40.5

the essay showed idea logically

Grammar and vocabulary need to be adjusted

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

TWN

B1_2

4

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35

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36

the writer tried to explain his idea with many supportive reasons

the answer was out of the point.

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

CHN

B1_2

7

8

7

8

8

7

7

8

7

7

75

74

74.5

the essay was well organized with good reason to support the main idea.

some run on sentences.

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

TWN

B1_1

6

6

6

7

5

6

6

7

7

7

65

63

64

The writer has unique reason to disagree on doing part time job.

The writer could not explain his idea logically enough. The reason he gave in the essay did not strong enough to support his idea.

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

IDN

B1_1

3

4

4

4

3

3

4

3

3

3

35

34

34.5

nan

the ideas were not well organized

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

THA

A2_0

3

3

3

3

3

3

3

3

3

3

30

30

30

The writer had good reason for support his idea

grammar and vocabulary need to be improved

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

TWN

B1_2

5

7

7

7

6

7

7

7

7

7

62

67

64.5

the essay was written to persuade reader to do parttime job

some vocabulary error

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what the purpose? Is it for the money, or is it the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lure you to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to in. , if money is your solitary goal and cannot be distracted by the of your circle the acquisition of the communication skills I suggest you better on your and not bother to think of a part time job. the simple reason that high marks can get you a better job. if you come to a part-time job for more, you can advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change an excellent university student to a new employee, you may scorn and criticism which will reflect on and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society firsthand, you learn a lot outside . you can see my opinions quite now Put away the money you can let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

If you resolve to have a part-time job, what are the purposes? Is it for the money, or is it for the experiences and the learning-in-the-process that lures your to take one?As we know, most of us have to step into the society after graduation, and the society which will confront us is quite different from the campus life we are used to lining in. So, if money is your solitary goal and your cannot be distracted by the expand of your circle, the acquisition of the communication skills. I suggest you'd better concentrate on your study and do not bother to think of a part time job. For the simple reason, that high marks can get you a better job. But if you come to a part-time job for more, you can face advantage of all that it has to offer. In the change of an excellent university student to a new employee, you may get scorn and criticism often. which will have your reflect on yourself and define who you are. Taking a part-time job will give you a glimpse of the real world and make you well-prepared for the future. By observing the society first hand, you learn a lot outside the book. So you can see my opinions quite clear now. Put away the money you can get let yourself develop quickly in your part time job experience!

KOR

B2_0

6

5

5

6

5

6

5

6

5

6

55

55

55

show the strong idea to disagreement and provide reasonable supports / strong of writing and grammar

a bit contrast of the consistency in anaphor, number (i.e. sing vs plural)

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

KOR

A2_0

4

3

3

2

2

2

3

1

1

5

26

26

26

Giving general idea and real happening to be as an introduction. Then showed own idea.

Rarely no example to support each idea/reason. Each view should be explain more.

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

ENS

ENS

9

8

6

7

6

7

7

8

7

7

72

72

72

The writer tried to represent different reason accord to the comments.

Rather unclear in the ideas that the topic asked for. Language was written confusing to realize. Must to improved more about grammar and arranged of the thought into writing.

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

TWN

A2_0

2

1

3

3

2

2

3

3

4

3

26

26

26

allow to uses complex and compound sentences

error grammar; 'maybe are..', article 'A example' and the pronoun 'they' used as object

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

IDN

B1_1

6

6

5

6

6

6

7

5

5

4

56

56

56

The detail and sample were given involving the extend of the topic since starting, middle along to a great ending of statement.

Language structure was made difficult to understand meaning.

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

IDN

B1_1

3

3

4

3

4

3

3

3

3

3

32

32

32

good format organization consist of introductory, body of essay, and own conclusion.

more detail needs for some points/ unclarity sentence

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

THA

A2_0

4

3

4

4

4

4

4

4

4

4

39

39

39

quite used technical term vocabulary about the topic / various vocabulary

without correctness in subject-verb agreement, article and preposition; to , for / and word engagement

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

TWN

B1_1

6

5

5

6

7

7

6

6

5

5

58

58

58

start with an essential introduction about how important to be adult which reveal an important reason.

inaccurate grammar, word choice, and punctuation in sentences / used unappreciated vocabulary

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

JPN

A2_0

10

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

91

91

91

strongly show agreement and various supported ideas / good logical idea connectors / express distinct idea of working experience

some connectors are unrequired; it sometimes interrupts readers in their connected ideas

I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

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I completely agree this statement. I have four that agree this Statement First ariety parttime job serve our experience For- example if I were in convenience store, I learn , good smile and good greet I were work in factory, I learn , how appliances are made by the actory. can receive variety experience by diverse part-time job. Second if I were work part time job, I find job or major. For example I work at institute for money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor my dream and need to wander anymore. Third I can know and concept of money. If I were earning money, priceless. Therefore I can't the money. I try to save and my parent's earning the money Finally Steve ob said "Connect the dots" So I challenge variety parttime that surely someday help me Consequently I assert that arttime job for college student.

I completely agree this statement. I have totally four reason that agree this statement First Variety part time job is serve our experience For- example if I were work in convenience store, I can learn ability king, good smile and good greet or If I were work in A factory, I learn patient, understand that how appliances are made by the Factory. Etc. we can receive many variety experience by doing diverse part-time job. Second if I were variety work part time job, I can find fitting job or major. For example I work at institute for my money, but fortunately I can find my job by working institute that teach for student. Then I can decide my dream. Also I can endeavor for my dream and I don't need to wander not any more. Third I can know valuable and concept of money. If I were hardly earning the money, the money is very priceless. Therefore I can't expense the money. I try to save the money and know my parent's difficult earning the money Finally Steve job's said "Connect the dots". So I challenge variety part time job's that surely someday help to me Consequently I assert that Part time job is need for college student.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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In my opinion, important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and could learn many things that in class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency . If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study in class. Also, you can different kinds of people in different job, you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, you can share the economic with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful And it really has a lot your future career life.

In my opinion, I think it's important for college students to have a part-time job. Why? I have two reasons. First, a part-time job can increase our experience, and you could learn many things that don't teach in the class. For example, if you work in a restaurant, you could learn how to communicate with different people, and you also could learn how to handle emergency condition. If you are a home-teacher, you could increase your patience and you will know it's not easy to be a good teacher, maybe you will study more hard in the class. Also, you can make different kinds of people in different job, than you could learn more from their experience. Second, a part-time job can earn money, than you can share the economic press with your parents. Maybe the money is not much, but the feeling of earning money by yourself is so good. Finally, I suggest college students should find a part-time job. Maybe the job you do has no relation with what you study now, but it's a good way to try different things. It will make your college life more colorful. And it really has a lot beneficial in your future career life.

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It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

TWN

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Vocabulary and grammar may be further improved.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

IDN

B1_2

4

9

3

9

3

3

3

9

3

3

37

49

43

The writer was able to present his opinions on two opposing standpoints in a convincing manner. Enough details and examples were also provided to justify his claims.

The writer may utilize use of more complex English grammar and vocabulary.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

CHN

B2_0

9

7

9

7

8

9

9

7

9

9

69

83

76

The writer showed much willingness in communicating as he presents his ideas in his essay.

However, ideas from personal experiences may be added to further justify claims and make writing more original.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

ENS

ENS

9

6

3

6

3

3

3

6

3

3

32

45

38.5

The writer gave answers in a very precise and logical manner. Examples for justification were enough.

More complex English words may be used by the writer to appear more fluent in using the English language.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

IDN

B1_2

5

9

6

9

6

6

6

7

6

6

79

66

72.5

Ideas were presented in a logical manner. Basic English grammar was observed in the essay.

The writer's vocabulary may be further widened to improve fluency of the English language.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

IDN

B1_1

4

3

5

3

5

5

5

3

5

5

61

43

52

Enough details were provided to support the writer's standpoint. Basic English grammar was also observed.

The writer may utilize more complex English grammar and vocabulary to make writing more fluent.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

THA

A2_0

5

9

7

9

7

7

7

9

7

7

32

74

53

The writer presented ideas in a very straightforward and logical manner.

The writer may improve his grammar and vocabulary to sound more fluent in using the English language.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

THA

B1_1

5

4

7

4

7

7

7

4

7

7

86

59

72.5

The writer presented ideas with sound reasoning and in a logical manner.

The ideas, however, were too general. Example's from personal experiences will further justify the writer's point.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor, cramschool teacher, sales and so on. I really agree a part-time job college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have part-time job. First, lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for part-time job to expense . In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and can avoid work. this is the main reason that college students to have part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, want someone no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have part-time job.

It is important for college students to have a part-time job. As everyone knows, lots of college students have a part-time job. I'm no exception. I also even got many part-time jobs at the same time, such as tutor who teaches sociology, cram school teacher, sales and so on. So I really agree has a part-time job in college life. There are some reasons to explain why we have a part-time job. First, now lots of goods are more expensive than before and families give children less pocket money. College students have to look for a part-time job to expense many things. In addition, I think that we can know many people who have their own characteristic in society, even be our friends. Finally, enhancing the social experience, practicing working attitude, gaining more jobs in the future and l can avoid to working nothing. And this is the main reason that college students to have a part-time job. In sum, having a part-time job let me understand that giving up halfway can't undertake any hard task nowadays. Besides, a boss didn't want that someone has no skill like coach potato in the company. Without a doubt, it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

KOR

B1_1

5

4

5

6

5

7

1

6

7

7

58

53

55.5

Transitional devices were used in the essay.

There is no clear conclusion, the paper just ends with a restatement of the first part of the essay.

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

THA

B1_2

8

7

8

8

8

9

7

9

7

7

83

78

80.5

The writer gave enumerated examples by using ordinal and cardinal adjectives as transitional devices.

inconsistent tenses, prepositions, and misusage of determiners are often seen in the essay.

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

HKG

B2_0

6

5

6

6

7

7

6

7

7

8

65

65

65

The writer pose some questions and reflects a sophisticated understanding of the main topic.

The writer ignores or superficially evaluates obvious alternative points of view that can support the claims in the text.

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

CHN

A2_0

3

3

3

2

3

3

4

2

3

4

30

30

30

The text's introduction is inviting, it also states significant concepts related to the topic which provides an overview of the essay

Main ideas are clear but are not well supported by detailed information.

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

THA

A2_0

3

1

3

2

3

3

4

2

3

4

28

28

28

The writer demonstrated a clear understanding of the relative merits of the main idea

There are instances in the text that are unfocused and in a sense of distracted the readers

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

JPN

B2_0

6

6

5

6

6

7

5

7

8

7

63

63

63

Connections between ideas seemed to be complete and significant for readers impact

Distracting errors in punctuation, spelling, capitalization are often seen in the text

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

CHN

B1_1

5

4

3

5

5

4

3

5

6

5

50

45

47.5

The ideas are consistently, original, insightful, and demonstrate a sophistication and complexity of thought.

The writer overuse short sentences, awkward wording, and sentences weakened by grammar/punctuation errors.

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

CHN

A2_0

9

9

8

8

9

9

8

5

6

8

90

79

84.5

The writer balanced out the judgement on the topic. He/she was able to give two different perspective that strengthen the claims of the text

There are statements that need to be clarified in order to be more comprehensible.

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

KOR

B1_2

8

7

8

8

9

7

7

9

8

8

85

79

82

The author have a keen process of analysis strategy that gave depth to the text.

The text arguments sometimes uses fallacious or irrelevant reasons, and unwarranted claims.

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

KOR

B2_0

4

4

4

4

2

3

4

2

2

1

25

30

27.5

The presented ideas are organized and was supported with substantial details to form logical transition of context

the writer could have strengthened the claims if certain word choices are replaced with its alternative

If we part—time job, of course we will experience and income by ourselves. job is a good thing to do free time especially college students because they have more free time and freedom to do anything they want. In my opinion, par time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it be a good experience for them. there are a lot of activities to at their universities and each activity will good experience it is not enough if they have problem money want to more income so parttime job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that my opinion important for college students. are we can help our parents to decrease if we have income from parttime . However, time job not important for someone who very rich but it is a good to new experience if you and income by yourself that make you so proud yourself.

If we do part—time job, of course we will have a good experience and we will get income by ourselves. Part time job is a good thing to do in free time especially in college students group because they have more free time and freedom to do anything that they want. In my opinion, part time job is a good thing to do and I think it is important for college students because they have many free time to do that and it will be a good experience for them. Though there are a lot of activities to do at their universities and each activity will give them the good experience put it is not enough if they have problem about money, they want to get more income so part time job is very important for people in this group. Another reason that support my opinion part time job is important for college students. There are we can help our parents to decrease the pay if we have income from part time job. However, part time job maybe not important for someone who very rich but it is a good chance to do for make a new experience and if you do it and when you get income by yourself that make you are so proud with yourself.

KOR

B1_1

2

2

4

2

4

4

3

5

5

6

35

37

36

The writer presented justifiable points, with regards to the topic.

Grammar, punctuations and sentence structure need improvements.

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

JPN

A2_0

3

4

4

4

4

5

5

7

6

7

51

49

50

The writer presented crucial points and was able to support his/her argument.

Grammar, spelling, and sentence structure need improvements.

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

CHN

A2_0

5

4

4

5

4

4

3

2

5

4

39

40

39.5

The writer was able to present valid arguments about the topic.

Some words are used inappropriately and grammar can be improved

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

JPN

B2_0

6

4

6

6

6

7

5

7

7

7

51

61

56

The writer conveyed good points to support his claims.

Grammar, spelling, and sentence structure need improvements.

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

THA

B1_2

3

5

4

4

5

4

5

6

6

5

44

47

45.5

The writer was able to present valid arguments about the topic.

Grammar, punctuations and sentence structure need improvements.

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

JPN

B2_0

5

4

4

4

5

6

5

6

6

6

51

51

51

The writer was able to present valid arguments about the topic.

The grammar and choice of words can be improved.

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

JPN

A2_0

4

5

5

5

4

4

5

5

3

5

41

45

43

The writer conveyed good points to support his claims.

Grammar, punctuations and sentence structure need improvements.

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

THA

A2_0

2

2

4

4

2

2

1

2

2

1

21

22

21.5

The writer conveyed good points to support his claims.

The sentence structure of the passage can still be improved.

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

SIN

B2_0

8

7

7

8

8

8

7

8

8

8

89

77

83

The writer presented justifiable points, with regards to the topic.

The grammar and sentence structure can be improved

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

CHN

A2_0

7

5

7

7

7

7

6

7

6

6

69

65

67

The writer was able to compare and contrast necessary arguments accordingly.

The grammar, punctuations, and sentence structure can be improved

I think parttime job is very importantare going to experience in parttime and earn money. many students think parttime more important than . Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to parttime . Parttime job experience is meet many people and experience. reason that students have parttime job. First, parttime job experience sociability that many people many part time people. sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social herefore many employers choose to social skill. Second, part time job is going to earn money. Many students received pocket money haven't parttime job experience money . When receive money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience many parttime jobs. These days Korea has many of students to experience. When a job, parttime experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will parttime job study more. they survive in a competitive society.

I think part time job is very important. Because we are going to learn experience in part time job and we earn much money. But many students think part time job more important than study. Nevertheless, I think that many people are going to have a part time job. Part time job experience is to be. Because meets many people and learn experience. Here is a lot of reason that students have part time job. First, the part time job experience is going to learn sociability that meets many people. Because many part time job meet people in these days. So sociability is very important. Many customers like to have high social skill worker. Therefore many employers choose to have social skill employee. Second, the part time job is going to earn much money. Many students received pocket money by parent. So there haven't part time job experience and earn money of them. When receive earn money, they are going to be pleased. Finally, they get experience of many part time jobs. These days Korea has many kind of job. So students are going to get experience. When find a job, part time job experience is very important. In conclusion, many students will have part time job. And student study more. So they survive in a competitive society.

IDN

A2_0

3

2

3

3

2

3

3

3

3

3

25

28

26.5

Basic command of grammar and sentence structure. Point were slightly relevant to the task

Errors in grammar, sentence structure as well as incorrect use of vocabulary made comprehensibility difficult

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

KOR

B2_0

6

6

6

6

6

5

5

5

6

6

50

57

53.5

Good command of grammar and sentence structure. Good use of words.

Writer explain about own experience but did not focus on explaining the important or disadvantages of part time job.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

IDN

B1_1

6

6

6

6

7

7

7

7

7

7

60

66

63

Points were relevant and well elaborated. Good command of grammar and sentence structure.

Some errors in basic grammar and sentence structure as well as incorrect use of words.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

IDN

B1_2

10

10

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

10

93

93

93

Excellent points and elaborations, which were well organized. Excellent mastery in vocabulary.

Some minor errors in grammar but very minimal and does not hamper understanding.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

ENS

ENS

8

8

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8

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9

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81

81.5

Points we well organized with excellent command of sentence structure and wide usage of vocabulary.

some minor errors in grammar.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

IDN

A2_0

7

7

7

7

7

6

6

7

7

7

62

68

65

Good points and elaborations with good command of basic grammar.

Some incorrect grammar and vocabulary usage that impedes the comprehensibility of the text.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

KOR

A2_0

4

5

5

5

4

5

4

4

5

5

43

46

44.5

Satisfactory usage of grammar and sentence structure.

Some incorrect usage of words. Some errors in grammar.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

IDN

B2_0

8

8

7

8

8

8

8

8

8

8

80

79

79.5

Points were organized well with excellent elaboration to get the point across. Excellent mastery of basic grammar with good sentence structure.

Some grammatical errors with some minor incorrect use of words.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

THA

B1_2

5

5

4

4

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7

6

7

8

7

50

59

54.5

Organization of points were good with good usage of sequencing discourse markers.

Sentence structure, vocabulary and punctuation need more improvement.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

THA

B1_1

4

4

4

4

4

4

4

4

5

5

40

42

41

Points written were relevant with satisfactory grammar and use of words.

Some incorrect sentence structure that made the sentences confusing. Errors in grammar.

I agree that college students have parttime job ecause college students parttime job, they improve College students experience social life early improve than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students get a jobcan adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will that money earning is very they think that money is precious easily money can parents college students earn money themselves Finally reason I agree that college students have they work parttime job, meet many people they can make many friends and meet people, they improve speaking skills Because speaking skills very important to their , improving is helpful a parttime job many benefits for college students Therefore college students can experience parttime job major parttime job is more effective If college students don't disturb, they can a part time job

I agree that college students have a part time job. Because if college students have part time job, they improve sociality College students experience social life early They improve sociality than students don't have a part time job As a result, the students will get a job, they can adapt more easily Also, college students earn money themselves without their parents help Therefore they will know that money earning is very hard So, they think that money is precious. They easily don't spend money And money worry can reduce to parents. As college students earn money themselves Finally the reason I agree that college students have a part time job is making friends While they work part time job, they meet many people So they can make many friends and they meet various many people, they improve speaking skills Because of speaking skills very important to their life, improving speaking skills is helpful themselves College students have a part time job is many benefits for college students Therefore college students can better to experience part time job Their major related part time job is more effective If college students don't disturb study, they can have a part time job is very good

THA

B1_1

7

7

6

7

7

7

8

8

7

6

70

70

70

the writer is very smart in writing, clear statement, logical and the essay is easy to understand.

there is some sentence repetition and some error of grammars may make confusing and comprehensible but the essay is still good.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

HKG

B2_0

9

8

9

9

8

8

6

9

8

8

82

82

82

the writer's perspectives are comprehensible and reasonable, her idea shows clearly and easy to understand.

there were some small error-free vocabulary and some sentences used mistakes wrong connectors.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

CHN

B1_1

4

5

5

6

4

4

5

6

6

5

50

50

50

The writer showed strong agreement and gave an example of life experience.

The essay had unnecessary supporting idea and few sentences made it confusing for readers.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

HKG

B2_0

7

4

4

6

6

6

6

5

5

6

55

55

55

The writer showed many positive points to support his idea and the essay was well organized to express his supportive idea.

The writer sought to articulate his thoughts and provide examples to back up his assertions.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

CHN

B1_1

8

7

6

7

6

7

7

6

6

6

66

66

66

the essay was comprehensible, logical and persuasive because the writer tried to describe idea to support his perspective.

There were some run-on error and wrong punctuation, grammar error. The essay could not well understandable and unclear in some topic.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

KOR

A2_0

7

6

6

7

6

7

6

7

6

7

65

65

65

The essay was persuasive with clear points and examples.

The essay could not well comprehensible and made confusing with incorrect punctuation, misspelling and wrong grammars.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

TWN

B1_1

3

1

2

3

2

3

2

2

2

3

23

23

23

The writer tried to explain his feeling thru his opinion.

The essay was difficult to understand because the ideas were not presented logically. The grammar might improved.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

TWN

B1_2

8

9

8

9

9

9

8

10

9

9

88

88

88

the writer expressed confident reason to explain his idea with clear examples and key main idea.

some small error-free vocabulary

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

THA

A2_0

2

3

2

3

3

3

2

2

3

4

27

27

27

The writer's language structure is excellent. There are scenarios that can be envisaged in this manner of thinking. and mention the story's benefits or byproducts

the grammar need to be improved.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

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the writer pointed out his idea clearly and describe examples reasonably.

there were redundant sentences and some error in vocabulary and grammar.

I agree college students part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by part-time job, can earning money very . they use their money seriously. college students have time if they want travel abroad, they can money by doing part-time job . Planning how to use money helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they a part-time job, they can meet people variety generation, from children to senior adults. they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they a part-time job, the more evaluated they . For example, their salary per hour . Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can their suitable future job such as teaching children, serv in shops, and so on. In fact, I have friends who want to become teachers they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. is an important thing when work. As above, they can society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have part-time job.

I agree that college students have a part-time job. There are five reasons to support my opinion. Firstly, by doing part-time job, they can find earning money very hard. So, they use their money seriously. And the college students have much time. So if they want travel abroad, they can make money by doing part-time job for their own. Planning how to use money is helpful when they begin to work. Secondly, if they do a part-time job, they can meet people of variety generation, from children to senior adults. So they can know various people's way of thinking. Thirdly, the harder they do a part-time job, the more evaluated they are. For example, their salary per hour is maybe up. Fourthly, by doing many kinds of part-time job, they can know their suitable future job such as teaching children, or serve customs in shops, and so on. In fact, I have a lot of friends who want to become teachers. And they teach junior high school students studying. Lastly, they have responsibility for their job. It is an important thing when they work. As above, they can know society's basic rules. This is why I agree that college students have a part-time job.

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Explanation is clear and very persuasive.

Maybe possible to use the sentences more economically.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

JPN

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Written with confidence. Tried to make the opinion explain clearly.

Need to add more examples to support the insistence.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

TWN

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Having strong concrete examples to support the ideas.

Poor grammar control and wrong usages of words made the essay difficult to be understandable.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

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Good arrangement to show two opposite opinions. Explanations are easy to understand.

Need to develop each ideas more.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

IDN

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Tried to think the theme from a few different points of view.

Some wrong usages of words. Need to deepen the ideas.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

KOR

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Tried to show own experience and express own feelings.

Few punctuation marks are used. Not written about college students' part-time job.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

IDN

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Few grammatical mistakes and no spelling mistakes.

Too long sentences. Better to organize the ideas more effectively.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

JPN

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No major grammatical error and no mistaken choice of words.

Maybe need to use more sophisticated words. Able to make the contents clearer.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

TWN

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No spelling mistakes and tried to use the examples properly.

Many grammatical errors and elusive expressions made the contents difficult to be comprehended.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

JPN

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Ideas are clear and understandable. Paragraph is well organized.

Many basic words are used and sometimes mistaken. Most of the sentences are simple.

hether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their . In addition, part-time job not only take up much of their free time but also mean little to . On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents. What's more, , if you do more work your free time, you will find life is dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job to some extent, indispensable to our college . Regardless of other people's , I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.

Whether college students should take part-time jobs has aroused great public concern. As far as I'm concerned, part-time job plays an increasing important role in college life and I'm for the idea. Nevertheless, several people argue that it is a waste of time to take a part-time job and obviously, college students ought to put more emphasis on their study. In addition, part-time job not only takes up much of their free time but also means little to them. On the contrary, others think that it is acceptable, reasonable, and beneficial to take a part-time job. The reasons are as follows. First of all, it is undeniable that college students can accumulate certain experience through part-time jobs. Then, as a result of doing part-time jobs, we can earn some pocket money in order to reduce parents' burden. What's more, admittedly, if you do some more work at your free time, you will find life is not so dull and you can do something meaningful to enjoy your college life. In a word, from my perspective, part-time job, to some extent, is indispensable to our college life. Regardless of other people's ideas, I support my own opinion and I think it is essential for college students to take part-time job.